जब हर जगह हर रूह में बसता है तू
फिर मेरी खता पर क्यूँ हँसता है तू
मैं हूँ तेरा अदना सा खिलौना खाक का
यूँ अब्र बन मुझ पर क्यूँ बरसता है तू
बेजान पत्थर को भी तुझे जान पूजता रहा
फिर भी मुझे इतना क्यूँ परखता है तू
मैं तो हर हाल मे हमेशा से तेरा गुलाम था
और कितनी परस्तिश को तरसता है तू
और कितनी ताफ्तिशें बाकि हैं जेहन में तेरे
खुदा हो कर भी क्यूँ बशर सा भरमता है तू
मैं तेरी तलाश मे दोज़ख तक था चल गया
मर रहा है इन्सां तेरा जन्नत मे क्या करता है तू
2 comments:
बेजान पत्थर को भी तुझे जान पूजता रहा
फिर भी मुझे इतना क्यूँ परखता है तू
It is amazing ...whole Gazal is complete and i like you attitude to play with the words with an innocence .....full of wisdom, i like that but one thing i will suggest you as a poet you are "best" and you need to know how to use common language words in poetry....look Sumitra Nandan Panth and Ramdhari Singh Dinkar are writers of hindi, still they are strange for most of us? and on other end there is Hariwansh rai bachhan and Gulzar, who are not addicted to write uneasy and deep words!!!
If you wish to reach most of the people then go with masses and you will find the best
this is in general not for this Gazal
and this is my opinion not any idea to hurt you. I know when someone asked me the same in my "budding days" i was also angry but today i know that poetry is to make things simple and straight not to complicate these.....!!!
One more thing, whenever you have someting to jot down never think to fit that in Gazal and Shers, every thought should be evolved to its own canvas, write anything whatever appears in your mind ...story, satire.
You are the one who sooths me when i read!!! Best of luck and may god bless you, you are like my younger sister so please ab itnee baq-baq ke baad SIr mat kahiyegaa...Ha ha ha ha!!
May God Bless You
मैं तेरी तलाश मे दोज़ख तक था चल गया
मर रहा है इन्सां तेरा जन्नत मे क्या करता है तू
nice one again.............
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